Impressive!
The atmosphere you've managed to set is impressive. You must've worked really hard on this one... Some people have said your voice acting is bad, I don't think so... but you could do with some subtitles, you know, for the foreign people (me!)... But it was not bad at all, I could get 90% of what you said, and that is far above my average.
And about the story, it was very interesting (heavily helped by the atmosphere I mentioned before), you kept me hooked till the end... You should definately finish it....
Good luck!!
(I liked the eye-warning thing! :) )